Tuesday, August 16, 2011
Changed it some what do you think?
Its pretty good! My only edit, "The she-wolf Maura flew through the thick tree trunks, she moved with speed and grace only one of her hue could achieve. She is no ordinary wolf; she is Naiargra, queen wolf of the forest-of-many-pines. She is not only the ruler of the wolf kingdom-of-many-pines but also the head of the Orgman the counsel of the wolf kingdoms in all the elfish forests." you mixed tenses, chose just one. I see why you did it, but it'll still flow better if you chose one, most likely past. But great job! Good luck and keep Writing :)
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