This is the first sonnet I have ever written, care to critique?

I agree with Dondi in that it is a good start, but you do need to fix the meter and syllable counts. Also, I would like to suggest that unless you are writing a period piece, you should avoid the urge to use archaic language such as: Thou, Thee, and Thine. It seriously distracts the reader from the theme and flow of the poem. Just my opinion to use or not use as you like.